Webb's revisions

1. When describing Parise include more on his background and how he got started. Maybe include his career so far in the pros.

2. Include some of his stats from various sources so we know how good he really is. Talk about how much of a factor he was in the Olympics.

3. Really try to set up a good scene like when he is on the ice, or even what you feel when you're playing and the thrill he must get from being able to do this for a living.

4. Make sure you don't ramble on about other players beside Parise. Hw is the guy that I want to read about in this story. Talk more about him growing up and learning the game in Minnesota.